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Vyasar Ganesan
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Alien Poetry 12: Redondilla

Alone tonight, it seems forever.
Really sucks, waiting to go home.
Feverish, mouth tastes like loam.
Damn this wasted endeavor.

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sudipal Comment by: sudipal - 2008-03-30 12:27
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had to look up 'loam'

pessimistic- but good, i like the last line; it makes a good ending
easywriter58 Comment by: easywriter58 Online- 2008-03-22 18:36
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Gee-where do you work? Patience is a virtue-so I hear.

Is that the right meter? Seems like line three is a bit short.
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