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Lebanese Lady
She lies amongst the rubble barely breathing; left for dead.
A dirty gray rag bound around her bleeding, ancient head.
Desert colors lie within her folds of leathered skin.
Missing teeth suck her mouth to a mere suggestion
Between promontories of her nose and chin.
Lazy flies roam her face, flick up every trace of moisture there.
She holds no strength to fend them off.
Rescuers find her. Compassionate arms raise her up.
From a plastic bottle with a built-in straw, the gift of life is given.
Elegant, grimy fingers reach to hold the bottle as a baby's would.
With no thought or intention amongst that bombed-out hell and desolation
Her little finger extends and crooks itself, in a manner no different from dowagers
Who nibble petit fours and sip from china teacups at the Ritz.
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Comment by: wizzer Online- 2008-04-01 22:24
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AWFULly good! too vivid! excellent
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Comment by: L J - 2008-03-29 11:51
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The pathos of civil war is beautifully achieved in this powerfully rendered prose. Your fleshy description of the impoverished Lebanese woman could be of any other woman negotiating the trauma of war. The image you paint is of a woman who once had everything, but we don't know this until the very last moment. The art of storytelling is not just plot, but characterisation as well. You have mastered this, effortlessly, it seems. However, we both know diferently, that a work of this calibre, short as it is, deserves to be widely read for it's statement is clear, wars effect us all, no matter who we are.
Commendable. Readable. Absolutely engaging. |
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Comment by: jgilgun - 2008-03-29 07:52
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Wow. Powerful. Important to write pieces like this, to show the humanity of those we harm through misguided and horrific policies and "interventions." Madness rules far too often.
Thank you for your kind words about my writing.
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| You're very observant and it shows. Most would ignore such details. Great poem with showing a wounded soul and a compassionate response. Reminds me of the Good Samaritan story. Very strong contrasts. Well done. Janet |
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| Thanks for commenting, Janyce. I saw this lady on television news, September 2006 when Israel bombed Lebanon. I was mesmerized by her hand, so elegant and inconguous amongst all that rubble and strife. |
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