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Comment by: alien - 2008-04-01 06:48
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Technically perfect and, tbh, really imaginitive poem. I like this a lot :)
Better than the 'final fling' one. :D |
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Comment by: Juan2 - 2008-03-29 13:50
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Fun little poem. I love the intro, gets us hooked with that exclamation point. My favorite line is 3, though, with its internal rhyme, soft alliteration, and the image of 'stem the floodtide' - for me, gave the poem sort of a tongue in cheek feel.
happy writings. |
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| You're absolutely right about that comma! I've scratched it. Thanks XX |
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i like.
good title.
good diction.
I'd take the comma out from after "world" on the third line, but that's all. |
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haha.. just for fun huh.
potent word choice..
stairgate, lock, contact, stem, floodtide, sweet, demented.
//nice..
cool title.
thanks for playing.
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