Alien Challende #12: Redondilla
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Alien Challende #12: Redondilla
Find me swift a helpmate to play
Amongst the trees above the sky
That we may live in bliss up high
And watch earthly concerns melt away.
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hi C..
nice, vast images in here. and you managed to avoid the sing song effect thats not for me.
the first line is my fave.
Amongst the trees above the sky
//and i keep going back to that one too..
amongst, trees, above, and sky
create a strong, clear image.
thanks,
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Comment by: frees340 Online- 2008-03-30 16:09
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Awww...its all happy and joyful like. Good work.
I would write more love poetry, but I'm beginning to find it tiring. Also, being pessimistic is fun.
But back to your piece:
Rockin! |
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