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aprilmayed
April Michelle Bratten
United States, North Dakota, Minot

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Where the Blood Originates

At the end of your tongue
there is a bell that does not ring.

You do not conceal it,
won't keep it as a secret
inside your delicate mouth, no,
you dangle it before me,
sharp as a hook,
provoking my body's need
to lunge and claw for it.

But I will not, can not thrust
across this table,
cutting my palms
on the barb of your resolve,

because eyes like knives
glance between us,
shifting in their seats,
they stall the verbs
desperate to trip from my mouth.

My will deflates,
as the blood quakes to your surface,
and the flush of your face reels me.

I want you to slice me
with your voice,
hold it over me,
and drag me,
legs kicking helplessly behind us.

I will make you fall,
body pounding into chest,
breathless,
your words, the hand that
gashes me towards silence.

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Wildefriend Comment by: Wildefriend - 2008-04-27 13:20
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Very nice...love the stalling verbs. They do tend to do that.
Stephie Comment by: Stephie - 2008-04-04 22:57
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April, your poetry is really evolving, and you have been truly inspired lately, and thus inspiring me. Your metaphors are richer, more textured.....I never thought that were possible. This poem in partiular does a great job expressing those situations where everyone knows it is best to remain quiet in regards to feelings, and that things will be communicated in different ways, in ways that are much more important and accurate than words.
Sophia Comment by: Sophia - 2008-04-03 01:16
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I love the contrasting images, the 'delicate mouth', the 'secret', against 'sharp as a hook' and lunging/clawing, barbs and knives. THe whole piece is wonderfully put together and reads beautifully.That last stanza is so strong. Your poetry is wonderful.
And thank you for your comments, they mean a lot :)
Sophia
johnnycoolhand Comment by: johnnycoolhand - 2008-03-30 20:02
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real nice. lyke a love scene in a horror movie. morbid n pretty cool
ausura90 Comment by: ausura90 - 2008-03-30 20:00
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This is wonderfully powerful. Your use of imagery, metaphors, and similes are excellent. I loved the entire poem, especially this stanza:

"I want you to slice me
with your voice,
hold it over me,
and drag me,
legs kicking helplessly behind us."
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