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saif
Saif J.
Iraq, Baghdad

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Places "my places in Baghdad"

As the birds cry,
As the leaves fall,
I feel the sorrow try,
Across my own wall,

And you there, my father,
Trying to hide the fright,
You're saying: "don't bother,
Everything will be alright",

The places, my father,
The places killing me,
The places, my father,
Always reminding me,

There … a friend was killed,
There … a neighbor was died,
There … bomb killed a tree,
There … insurgents chose to hide,

And you there, my father,
Trying to hide the fright,
You're saying: "don’t bother,
Everything will be alright",

It's jail, my father,
This house is nothing but jail,
It's jail, my father,
And my freedom is for sale,

"Don't be out", "don't be late",
"Don't say that", "unknown fate"
That's my words…
That's my world…


I can see my window,
I can feel the sun,
And there in the sky,
I can hear the destiny,
Telling me it's done!

"It's done … it's done …"
"Hold on … it's done …"
"Hold on and close your eyes …"
"Hold on … no more lies …"
"Hold on … it's done …"

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Kav Comment by: Kav - 2008-07-31 13:23
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beautiful emotional poem full of a lot of mixed feelings :, life, war, anger. i think you did a good job portraying all of this with your simple words

This has vivid imagery too
kpguevarra Comment by: kpguevarra - 2008-04-09 18:21
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touching! nice. i can feel the emotional investment here.
saif Comment by: saif - 2008-04-01 03:27
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thank you so much sadon.. i appreaciate every word and thank you for correction.. my english is not that well but i will try to improve it.
thank you jgilgun for the comment..
and thanks to everybody who passed from here..
jgilgun Comment by: jgilgun - 2008-03-31 12:07
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Your poem makes me weep for what the U.S. government has done to you, to your compatriots, your country, the region, and to human dignity and work.
sadon Comment by: sadon - 2008-03-31 11:55
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very touching! good job i would.
small thing though,think it shud be 'there...a neighbour had died' and 'i can hear destiny'.
great read! thanks for sharing
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