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Is He Here?
If he came, so silently,
I could not hear his breath,
Still I would know he stood behind,
As others would know Death.
And yet this specter I'd welcome,
Though I'd dare not turn around.
For a moment- Think! My heart would fly!
My feet would leave the ground!
He would not need to offer a whisper-
Much less, brave heart, a touch!
And I would know him as the one
I've longed for so much!
And would I even dare a word,
Lest this wondrous spell be broken?
Leaving all the words, of a lifetime or more,
These vows of love, unspoken?
And had I even woken yet,
To feel his soul so near?
Dare I even look to see?
To risk that he's not here?
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| Spooky and clever! I like it! |
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"It's supposed to read, "Long-ed for so much," but I wasn't sure that was the right way to write it."
I don't see anything wrong with the way you have it Laurie. :) |
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Comment by: MsWizard Online- 2008-04-03 01:43
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| Oh the last stanza really was so right on the money, the last two lines in particular. We do definitely have different styles but I believe our thoughts are one and the same on this piece for sure. Wonderful! |
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Comment by: Ithiya - 2008-04-02 20:36
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| It's supposed to read, "Long-ed for so much," but I wasn't sure that was the right way to write it. |
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I like this spooky tale, it has nice a rhythm, slightly off balance in the penultimate stanza, but easily corrected I think. :)
I think the departed, and this is purely opinion, given an afterlife, only need to be thought of to know they are in your thoughts… and this is the connection between the realms. |
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