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Informal Grae
Graeme Sandford
United Kingdom, HAMPSHIRE, Totton

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But Not Buried Deep Enough - Wee #31

Deep. No, much deeper than that - really deep. That’s where the Truth was hidden. Buried long ago by desperate people enduring their final days, secreted in natural chambers far beneath the Earth’s surface. The entrance back-filled by tons of rock, the location soon lost to memory; as were those who’d chosen the hiding place.

But, as they say: the Truth will out.”

Seismic shifts in the Earth’s crust created convulsions, and what for so long was inaccessible has risen. Once found, the Truth will change all of mankind’s thoughts and beliefs for ever.

The Truth will definitely out.

It would have been better that this thing remained buried, never saw the light of day again. But, the Earth’s natural flow decided that changes would be made. Evolution's nature is such that from this moment on Man will decline and reign no more.


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easywriter58 Comment by: easywriter58 - 2008-04-13 16:32
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The Truth will definitely out.<--guess this is a new expression-something outing itself never entered my vocabulary. You have this mentioned twice-I'd only use it once.

I presume it is a creature you are talking about, brought back to life from seismic activity. A good start to a Sci/fi story.
tcbswan Comment by: tcbswan - 2008-04-11 11:30
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coool--a bit of sci-fi--enjoyed the read and the way you left the "Truth" discovered but unknown. only one tiny suggestion--you mention "Truths" at one point and it seemed to me (maybe) it should remain singular? just a thought--cool read~
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sarra Comment by: sarra - 2008-04-09 22:29
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I liked this a lot, Grae. Makes me need to know more; the 5 W's, matter of fact!!

Also I wanted to let you know I took your critique to heart and made revisions of that 5th paragraph.
I also ended up critiquing myself in my own reply above yours. hahaha

thanks though! I've never seen that happen anywhere on here. Someone critiquing their OWN writing in the comment space.
You Rawk.
Stephyblue Comment by: Stephyblue - 2008-04-09 08:13
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Oooh. I likey! I think this could definately be the start of something longer. Did you have that in mind?
ParchmentPoetry Comment by: ParchmentPoetry - 2008-04-07 22:23
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Would make a great Sci-Fi novel intro. Love the descriptions. I, too, question the caps on Man in the last line. I'm not sure Man ever reigned over much. Just my observation of mankind. Good work. I do think a wider development would be an interesting read. J
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