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sydniiewashere
Cindy Guzman
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United States, CA, Newport beach

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when words are spoken from you

the perfect symmetry of your arm holding those books
make your attractive poise stand out in the middle of the blurry crowd
the smile that I breathe out is for your looks
knowing that the spectrum of ifs and maybes are in my way

you conquer rather than attack
you demand and you're obeyed
restless when succumbing to another heart
obedient to only your egotistical instinct that never waits

words are spoken from your well shaped lips
all livings disappear in the mist my hallucination creates
once again I hear words not directed to me
subsequently I bow my head in concentration.

4/4/08

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skypoetone Comment by: skypoetone - 2008-10-27 15:58
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I get the impression you have a crush on this professor, lol. It is excellently well written. ~T
Noor Comment by: Noor - 2008-09-22 23:19
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Personally I thought it was very well written.
Mind if I ask who is it about? =p
wgallant Comment by: wgallant - 2008-08-11 04:37
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Seems to be an example of the attraction youth often mistakes for love. A little experience and a lot of heartbreak will remedy that.

Petty carp: the "your" in line six might better be you're.
FantasticFantasy Comment by: FantasticFantasy - 2008-04-04 21:24
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hmm... I like it. It's one of those "seeing the person you don't know you love yet across the room" poems. Very well-written.
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