writing community
Sign In Here | Lost Password | FREE Sign Up
E-mail: Password:
Remember login  
The place for writers:
Upload your writing in minutes, receive peer feedback from other writers, poets, authors, then get your work published out there in the real world.       Learn how other writers are doing it.

 
Jaffacake
Jamilla Blue
United Kingdom, London

Words: 106
Access: Public
Comments: 5

Forward to a friend
Print Version
E-mail this writer E-mail this user 
View Author profile
Add to Readers  




Sounds of Death

Sounds of Death

Listening to the silence
A cold, empty sound.
The deafening beat of my heart.
Running, stumbling, pounding, floundering
And that aint the worst part.

Listening to the gunshot.
A cruel, sharp sound.
The quickening flap of a bird.
Guttering, choking, frowning, drowning
The sounds of death sweetly heard.

Listening to the screams.
A lonely, sour sound.
The wakening cry of dreadful dreams.
Stuttering, crying, sighing, lying
The few rays of light as it beams.

The taste of blood on the tongue.
The smell of death, sickly sweet.
Sleeping through terror, night’s misery.
Dying, crying, praying, bleeding
Dawn, as the birds ‘tweet tweet.’

Want to comment on this Poetry?
Sign up to Edit Red and you will be able to comment on Poetry and get access to: Upload your own stories and poems, get readers and their feedback, promote your work...
Sign up






[Back to top]
Comments  
lflwriter Comment by: lflwriter - 2008-08-12 15:20
Add to Readers
      
I sense the rush of fear--fear of violence and death and the finality that means.
konk Comment by: konk - 2008-08-11 12:10
Add to Readers
      
wow. this is really moving.
lizinez Comment by: lizinez - 2008-07-07 13:01
Add to Readers
      
Deep. *SNAPS Snaps!*
frees340 Comment by: frees340 - 2008-04-09 16:37
Add to Readers
      
Its dark. Which is nice. And its death. Which is not so nice, but still nice in a literary sense.
There are a few minor cliches, but I don't think it steals from the piece. You really whacked this one out of the ballpark, its great.
Apheliac Comment by: Apheliac - 2008-04-06 11:16
Add to Readers
      
I love the way you in every verse put a line, e.g 'dying, crying, praying, bleeding' etc. A beautiful poem.
1

Sponsored Ads


By Jaffacake

Featured Writers

Advertising - Terms & Conditions - Short Story Submissions - Contact - Writing Competitions - Writing Links - Book Promotion - Sky-Tribe.com - alanemmins.com
  Member short stories, poems, comments and other contributions are owned by the poster.
Copyright 2003 - 2007 Edit Red I/S