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helao
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United States, CA

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Friday Night Delight

She grabs the long stiff thing and caresses it--it’s been a while since she has touched it—and it feels awesome. It’s Friday night and she and he just had take-out, sashimi with cold sake.

She feels a bit tipsy and daring. The time is so right. She has been thinking about it, becoming excited at the thought of it after a week of long hours at the office.

She giggles while kicking off slippers, undoing her ponytail. He runs fingers though her voluminous hair while she holds onto the long thing, stroking it, feeling its texture.

He takes her hand off it and smiles. “You think you’re so sly, don’t you? Just because you’re hot you think you can just take advantage of me, don’t you?”

She nods and takes a hold of it again, purring. She looks deeply into his eyes and can tell he’s going to succumb to her. “Here, let me do it,” she whispers, “just sit back and enjoy.”

He groans and leans back. “Okay, knock yourself out. You’re in charge tonight.”

Her face lights up and grips it greedily. “Yes!” She flips channels with the remote and presses Movies on Demand. “Hello, Mr. Brook!”

She grabs a handful of popcorn as the title comes on, anticipating Kevin Costner’s performance as the charming, sympathetic serial killer.

The power is dizzying--from now on she will be an equal partner in choosing their viewing pleasure. No more seething through the Military Channel and mindless action flicks. That’s right, buddy--she’s thinking--no more waiting till you’re snoring in your Archie Bunker chair so I can flip to Forensic Files, Law and Order, or Indie Film Channel.

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MsWizard Comment by: MsWizard Online- 2008-04-11 09:13
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Clever clever clever!
Tony16 Comment by: Tony16 - 2008-04-09 22:00
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Good going Sean
helao Comment by: helao - 2008-04-08 11:28
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tanks, thomas, I'm honored. Welcome to edit red.

I knew going in that people will know right away it's not a sex scene. But dammit, I had to write about the remote control issue. heh
txeeyore1976 Comment by: txeeyore1976 - 2008-04-08 03:44
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The dialogue is pretty good, but I have to admit, I figured from the opening line this was going to be a "bait-and-switch" type thing where you tried to get everyone to think dirty of something innocent. How did I know? Because it's rare that you see fiction about sex where the dialogue is that "graphic." But still, very good dialogue and the story is swiftly paced, balancing well between dialogue and description.

You're my first review here!

Thomas
helao Comment by: helao - 2008-04-07 11:37
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hahahaha--oh, man, that's genius, matt. hmmm...

thanks for reading and commenting.

I;m sure man couples fight over the remote, which is why in our house we have his and hers. I have stories about that.
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