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Brett Haymaker
United States, Pennsylvania, Philadelphia

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Bourgeoisie of the Sassafras Tree

The difference between,
when in a comparison,
bitter and better,
is the same difference
between you,
and i.

Except
between i,
and e
very
thing.


And that difference is clear
unless you have a mouth
full of P's
or a face
smothered in B's
or a set of eyes
that peer through grass and reeds
but a pair of hands
and can't draw C's


Or a cat that steals nine slumbers,
Siamee-ease, if you plea-ease

Or a life worth ten numbers,
in a world divisible by threes.

Not enough paper is derived from lumber,
for China and it's birth law decrees.

Or like a draftee, who upon his signature,
cannot with out a doubt foresee
his timed over exposure, killing overseas,
or of his death on film-
dieing of black
lung disease

the difference is clear,
between you
and between
i

between better
and between

bitter

between
guarantee
and
insanity plea

between
honey,
and the
bee.

Between
oil career
and
internal ear.

between
one rupee
and
the salt key

between cheap rhyme
and war crime

between apple fritter
and a cocoa plum satellite
transmitter

between
Better
and
bitter

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Johndeprey Comment by: Johndeprey - 2008-04-19 21:11
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Wonderful. Yes, it's begging to be performed (and I realise why you point out my poems are "calm"!) This poem is John Donne like in it's playful use of spelling changing the meanings of words - I love the contrast between "guarantee" and "insanity plea". The humour of the poem gives it punch. It could be a rant at a lover or at a political standpoint or at the media. Very good poetry satisfyingly set in the English tradition!
peperopocky Comment by: peperopocky - 2008-04-17 17:40
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one word: awesome. i really enjoyed this and i really want you to speak this out loud at some sort of poetry slam for sure.

and you caught me when you said this:
the difference is clear,
between you
and between
i

i wanted this:

the difference is clear,
between you
and between
me
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