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dylanhock
Dylan Hock
United States, CO, Boulder

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poem

do
yourself a favor and
let bygones be
all the temptation you need –
never more than a whim’s peroxide

however much it may hurt
obfuscate the preternatural urges
called upon by your impulsive slavery –
kites will never do without the wind

don’t wind your string up
year after year
only to lose the tail kerchief
blazed along the sun’s horizon;
no one ever sees as far as that.
instead,
hobble up the road
overly sure of yourself without
cause or justification.
knights are dark, but poetry is love
& doing it thus
holds enough answers
for the time being.

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AMorgan Comment by: AMorgan - 2008-04-28 00:41
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Hey there! I don't log on this often (and don't have reliable internet at all- just free wireless, actually), so I just saw your comments! I checked out the link you sent and dug it- I would definitely be interested in being considered for the next issue, if it's still not too late :)

Now on to this poem...this was a great first poem to read! I'm definitely impressed. I really love your word choice and, as silly as it sounds, the simple use of symbols instead of words. The ending is wonderful- I don't know any way it could be better because, as it is, it is blunt and bold, yet beautiful and warm- a wonderful representation of what I take the main message of the poem to be :)

Also, the kite metaphor is lovely!
heidiheimler Comment by: heidiheimler - 2008-04-15 06:24
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Dylan Hock's poetry is not only powerfully evocative of both thought and emotion - although it does that in spades. It puts the reader in awe of words. A rarity indeed!
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