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daninkie
Danae Gallardo
Philippines, Baguio

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I was hoping
I could ground.
Feel you
your loamy touch beneath my weightless feet.
I wish to lay down,
To dig deep
and lift my hands,
left with some of you.
You.

just you.

you.
some favorite
some low-laying being
who brings so much to everybody else.
All except me.

Me.

You, me.
You.
You are untouchable.
And I am.
I. am.
I am the sky
I cannot hold you, let alone touch you.
As if two lovers, forbidden to ever meet again.

Lovers.
Nevertheless, we bend, we break, we disobey.
How could the sky ever touch the ground?

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daninkie Comment by: daninkie - 2008-04-15 18:45
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Thank you Mr Sam S Sterling.
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daninkie Comment by: daninkie - 2008-04-15 18:45
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if not me,but my minions, how must they return his touch? they merely evaporate and return to me, but lose their essence.



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but hey, that works.
mmsiraj Comment by: mmsiraj - 2008-04-14 11:26
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Let the sky burst forth, let it rain, let it swell the banks and wash over the parched earth. The sky will touch the ground. Let it rain.
Sam S Sterling Comment by: Sam S Sterling - 2008-04-14 01:44
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A nice extended metaphor for the distance between people. It works well.
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