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I loved him with all that I had.
The things he did drove me mad.
Insanity was non stop.
My marriage had been a flop.
I was unlucky in love.
We got a divorce.
I had no choice of course.
Now I sleep alone.
Still smelling his cologne.
I was unlucky in love.
I will love again someday.
Maybe next time without dismay.
But, until then I will wait.
For now I will leave my future up to fate.
I was unlucky in love.
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This is also a good start but maybe you should think about being a bit more revealing. What were the things that drove you mad? I don't mean to describe them literally, but you have to have some way of making it compelling for us to read--so thst we feel what the speaker feels.
You might want to experiment with what were the lucky thins that were part of the relationship that turned out to be unlucky???? :-)
It sounds like a song! I loved how you were able to incorporate the rhyming into your piece. It is by no means required for poetry but it's beautiful none the less. However it just feels unfinished. maybe you could add more and finish with some resolution to the issue your piece is about, or not. I very much liked it.
