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Thula7
Jen Steffen
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United States, MN, Minneapolis

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Splinter - wee challenge 32

Pain jarred me out of rhythm, sending sparks through my foot, up my ankle and into my leg. I stopped jogging and dropped to one knee. Looking at my bloody toes conjured up memories of my mother’s words.

“Never run in sandals. You’ll break your toe.”

Sighing, I slumped back on my rump and prodded my aching toe. Bones remained straight, but it throbbed angrily as I bent it, twisted it. Then, wedged beneath the nail, I saw a splinter. Gingerly touching the offending probe, I winced, intending to yank it out in one motion.

The fragment protested my hesitant fingers. I cried with pain. Slowly, I wiggled the piece side to side, until, with a mind of its own, it flew from my loose grasp. Yelling my frustration, I pounded the pavement beside me.

I stood, carefully testing my toes. My digits settled on a steady throb, and taking a shaky breath, I continued my journey, limping to my destination. I needed a much better reward now.

“A large hot fudge Sundae.” Dairy Queen is almost worth a sliver.

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DavidHe Comment by: DavidHe - 2008-08-03 21:40
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A very good story. Well done. I hope you can comment on my story. Best wishes.
TL Boehm Comment by: TL Boehm - 2008-06-17 07:17
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Nicely done, each word seems placed for maximum impact (no pun intended) this is a carefully crafted piece of flash fiction - but it reads easily - sprinkled with just the right amount of humor and familiarity - I was entertained.
Arley Comment by: Arley - 2008-04-21 06:10
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What is it with you gals and splinters under the nails? Yeeeooouuccchh! Just came from Karen's story. Good job, Jen! Made me feel the pain.
ParchmentPoetry Comment by: ParchmentPoetry - 2008-04-19 21:23
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Sounds like a commercial. Love Dairy Queen. I don't think the last part needs past tense as suggested above. Reads fine to me. Thanks for sharing. J
easywriter58 Comment by: easywriter58 - 2008-04-19 13:50
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I needed a much better reward now-could say: I needed a well deserved reward now. Same number of words.
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