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Johndeprey
John de Prey
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United Kingdom, Hampshire

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Burren

Trudging splattered tarmac, welly booted
cloth capped and sweatered in pea pod green,
"When was he born? The calf you mean?
Three weeks ago, on the Wednesday".
The wrought strength in his face could knock you
over, but each word he stoops to heave,
unsure how his great hands can take ahold,
how his legs can bend to extract it from the
squelch of his long silent day, to struggle
up each drystone word, to conjure the megalithic
joy of a calf. And on he goes to the gate,
to the holy family standing there, each ear
yellow tagged for the butcher‘s slab. They‘ve
forgotten where they were going. Then on
they‘re urged with a touch of his hand into the soft
field; and the blue metalled road returns
to emptiness, whispering silence, his words
dissolved, weathered away in the wet wind.

County Clare, Ireland
March 2008

Note: what he actually said was "......two weeks last Wednesday......that‘ll be three weeks next Wednesday......"

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Johndeprey Comment by: Johndeprey Online- 2008-08-29 23:29
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Thanks for your comments. No deep thought, it's just a picture made of the images that naurish you in Ireland. I was raised on a farm and remember that mixture of gentleness and apparent callousness, also the sound of the heavy tread of welly boots on tarmac, solitude in the fields where it always seemed to be drizzling.
CrookedPlacebo Comment by: CrookedPlacebo - 2008-05-01 17:17
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Can't put my finger on it as a whole, though its structured well. Vary cool. Keep it up.
madmonk Comment by: madmonk - 2008-04-27 08:44
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The voice of the poem actually pricks your mind. Very well written.
phillmag Comment by: phillmag Online- 2008-04-22 05:04
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so many things to like in this: to struggle up each drystone word- each ear yellow tagged for butcher's slab- whispered silence, his words/dissolved, weathered away in the wet winds. NICE!

Namaste, Phill.
gluedbranches Comment by: gluedbranches - 2008-04-19 16:00
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I really enjoy your stuff. I'm not going to say how much I loved this, and other poems. And later on, I won't be thinking how I can adopt your voice and calm when I'm writing my own poem :)

thank you for this, and the rest.
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