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| as per Valerie's advice I have extended this one. thanks again :) |
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| really appreciate i valerie. will make the change on "not" and will defintely work on each day of the week...thanks again :) |
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Comment by: Valerie - 2008-04-28 05:19
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| Very cute. It would be way too cool if you wrote a verse for every day of the week. Just a thought. . .maybe transpose verses 2 and 3 so that the days of the week are in a natural order. I agree with Parchment, that you should drop "without" and use "not". . .I would think that a child would learn "not" before saying "without." Sweet! |
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| I know what you mean Janet. I had to keep in mind the language of a child and I didn't want the rhythm to be too "perfect". But I can see your suggestion would still fit inside a child's vocab. I'll think on that. Thanks a lot. |
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well done
sounds like a strong willed child
the line about the book
you could change one word and keep the rhythm
drop without and add not
thanks for sharing
janet |
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