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mikerotheatre
Mike Rogers
United Kingdom

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SOMEWHERE BETWEEN 18 AND 130

A MODERN SONNET

If I described you as old Shakespeare did,
Producing all the props that one expects,
Sun, moon and stars, the flash of an eyelid
Trembling the earth – that you, in all respects,
Were cataclysmic, cosmic, all the rest,
If I descanted on your thrilling voice,
Compared all beauties, rating you the best,
League tables, prizes, cups, rosettes, the choice
Of all the phone-lines, all the people’s votes
Selecting you, you, you, beyond all reach,
The face that launched a thousand paper boats
Your name and mobile written down on each –
If I did that: then say, where would you be?
The writing’s mine. Who’s great? It’s me, me, me!


I wrote this while another teacher was teaching a Year 7 class about Shakespeare's sonnets. At the end of the lesson, I read it out, and the class gave me a round of applause.

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RossEan Comment by: RossEan - 2008-05-09 02:24
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Those boats that you cast, into the endless sea, mean so little; they mean nothing to me. The sonnets that you sing, with care and delight, will never be a song, they will never fill the night.

If Shakespeare were alive, he would ramble about your nonsense. He would write a tragedy, that would mirror your history. He would mock your entire life, he would tear you apart at the seams.

if there were words that could be spoken, to redeem the time you have wasted. They wouldnt be verbs and nouns. They'd be profound and easily spoken.

somewhere between 18 and 300.. there is a peace to be found, but not by the living. Though you think you are the king, you are the servant serving breakfast. even though you think you are respected, you are aged and completely neglected.

words are like the mirror, they are there to make a point. you are tired and exhausted; and i am nothing but a mistake.
Johndeprey Comment by: Johndeprey Online- 2008-04-25 00:07
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Well we all have occasional lapses. He might have been drunk when he wrote that.....
mikerotheatre Comment by: mikerotheatre - 2008-04-24 06:24
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Not what he says in the sonnets:
Not marble or the gilded monuments
Of princes shall outlive this powerful rhyme...
Johndeprey Comment by: Johndeprey Online- 2008-04-22 01:42
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Ah, but my impression of Shakespeare was that he wasn't doing it for fame and immortality (as did Milton, or Phillip Larkin). He did it to put on the next play. He wanted money, women and a jar or two in the Mermaid.
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