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| Bebe... Had to read this a few times then it came on light the proverbial light bulb, lol. Powerful and exacting! |
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thank you all for wonderful comments.
Patrick, this one had to have the carry over to give a sense of deception & feeling. Glad it worked for you. Thanks as always.:-)
Bebe |
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| its simple and well put into words, i liked how you carried the endings of the previous lines onto your beginings of your next lines. nice read, thank you. Patrick. |
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| I like it, especially the capitalization of all the words which lends a certain intensity and impact to the piece. Very good! |
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Comment by: Loloix - 2008-04-21 21:28
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i like the combination of concrete significant image (first three lines) & the abstraction (last two lines)..
so intense! |
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