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Alien Poetry 14- Punctuation Free
Accented aces
Agrarian adverts
They all serve the
Ardent androids
Filled with final freedom
They reign supreme with wrath
No fear to deal
Only death and paranoia
Prescribing parabolic phenomena
And depression a la carte
Slaying rosebud puppies
Paving concrete tempers
Hang the hoary head
There cannot be escape
You shall never return
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| I needed a dictionary just to read it. Words bigger than the are giving me trouble tonight. Thanks for sharing. J |
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Comment by: Juan2 - 2008-04-25 17:41
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Feels a little doomsday-y, what with ardent androids reigning with wrath and all. And I can only imagine what dark secrets might lurk in the mind thinking of slaying rosebud puppies! Yup, definitely a dark, chaotic feel to this one, if not wholly complete in message.
happy writings. |
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Comment by: Valerie - 2008-04-25 02:47
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| I'm in agreement with the others. I don't understand what the poem is about, and maybe that's an indication of your brilliance. Like Champagne wrote, it is an exercise in alliteration, and still, that can be overdone. |
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I'll fix it! Dont be mad!
I didnt use a dictionary once, by the way. I'm that smart! |
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Hang the hoary head! That's a fantastic line. Thought this was great fun, although it went right over my head in places. Do you really mean acclimation in the first line, or is it a typo for acclamation?
Thanks for the read XX |
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