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Comment by: 12R - 2008-04-28 07:12
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Fair enough, Alien. Sometimes its hard [for me] to make sure I'm not being too vague without jumping out and saying, "It's an apple." That's the challenge of all writing though. You don't want to hold the reader's hand, but you don't want to leave them lost either.
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Comment by: alien - 2008-04-28 04:06
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I think there's a lot of scope for interpretation in this one, largely, I guess on the mood of the reader. That's a good skill to have, because your work will affect many different people in as many different ways as theya re different themselves. That makes this very much a personal thing for the reader.
However, I would find this a little vague and because I personally couldn't find enough clues to what this was about (I don't mind admitting my own ignorance), I found it a little hard to get into. However, I did enjoy your structure and language. I just found myself trying so hard to put a meaning to it that it lost some of its immediacy.
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| Nice-and I didn't need Webster for any of it. Thanks for sharing. Made me smile, too. I needed that. J |
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Comment by: Valerie - 2008-04-24 07:42
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Clever. Who needs punctuation or caps! I had no problem reading this.
I liked a lot, "howitfalls." I'll have to try this one day - this no spacing of words. It's very effective in this poem. |
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| I hope your LS gets to pick the whitest piece of apple. Really well spaced with your line breaks directing the reader's punctuation brilliantly. Very good poem. |
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