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Comment by: Saswat - 2008-05-06 01:19
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| "...and I finally notice her new necklace". The 'finally' makes me wonder if she suspected Tracey was the one. And the connection she makes between Tracey's necklace and him may be the outcome of her wanting to find a connection rather than there actually being any. Anyways, nice reading as usual. |
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Comment by: karjon - 2008-04-29 12:50
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Like Nora, I stumbled over 'Burning my tongue on coffee' - other than that, it's a wee cracker. Well done.
Cheers
Karen |
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Comment by: Nora - 2008-04-28 20:17
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Great opening line. What a jerk. I have to say, I stumbled on this sentence:
Burning my tongue on coffee.
But the rest was cool. |
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Comment by: mitra - 2008-04-26 20:26
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| That was intense. Instead of a reply, the silence was enough to say it all. Good choice. |
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| Nice. Sounds like a triagle in the making and a friendship breaking. Ouch. J |
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