Just a quick snippet today as I’ve not actually written any more words in the last 24 hours, just gone over and over what I wrote for chapter five last night, still trying to make sense of it and where it’s going.

I’ve never written a serious combat scene before, of someone getting truly fucked up, but I had to give it a go in chapter four at a very pivotal point. This is the opening paragraph to that scene.

“The Faster couldn’t quite understand why his speech was slowing down until it was too late, and he heard this one coming. A wind-rush of compacted air pushed forward by a flat and accelerating surface, a fist, and then a second mighty crash into the temple opposite to where the first one had landed, impacting with his head before the kinetic wave of energy from the previous blow had fully escaped. The terminal force shooting a rebound shockwave of strength back in the opposite direction through his skull. Not quite knowing what to do and ravaged by instantaneous brute force his cranium seemed to collapse, spine compressing, his feet and legs shot clean out in front of him sending him to the ground at speed and squeezing his brain, compressing his eye socket and making its contents shoot clear out of his skull.”

Comments, ideas, suggestions welcomed as always.

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