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The Familiar Stranger
You see me, but you don’t know
the name that goes with the face.
You are told that we have met,
but not the time, reason or place.
Once I was your ‘everything’,
you, to me still are.
Then they cut me from your mind
and stuck me in a jar.
I’ll try again tomorrow
and again, the day after that.
I’ll keep hoping for a glimmer,
some sign I have you back.
They tell me it just takes time.
I have plenty of that now.
But I try because I love you,
not just to honor a vow.
You don’t know me from Adam,
so I may as well be he.
I’m willing to be someone else
if it brings you back to me.
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Comment by: roy - 2008-11-08 04:24
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| The painful reminder of something so loved lost, out there, but lost. Anyone who has experience this can relate to the words and theme you chose in this poem. A very well done job of espression and I don't think I am going to read this one again, the reminder is too painful to bare. |
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Comment by: menoh - 2008-10-23 21:54
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| I got a sense of strong love, and after doing something stupid to jeopardize it, a realization that you might never have that love again, but the hopeful waiting that time might change its mind. I like it. While some might say you are a fool to wait and still hope, love is indeed something that important to wait and hope for. |
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Comment by: kpotter - 2008-05-24 13:55
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What has happened to her?
It reminds me of that movie about removing memory- Eternal sunshine of the spotless Mind I think is what it is called?
I love the theme of love... and here the speaker goes deeply into the idea of giving up Everything for love- even who he is. Although I do wonder about Adam.. seeing as how he is both a character in your short story and also the first man.
Maybe the woman has a memory loss problem of some sort. If that is the case though, I don't understand that someone purposefully cut him from her mind.
The image of being put in a jar is fantastic and clearly sets the poem into a medical-like context.
Nice rhyming, makes the poem flow together well.
"not just to honor a vow" breaks apart from the rest of the poem in pace. The sounds that come together in it are a little less flowy then the rest of the lines... I personally thought it a little disruptive. I think its mainly the words "just to" that hang it up... but also "a". I don't know what do you think?
Someone up there suggested we read it slowly, but the fact is that actually the poem is written in a way that is read very quickly. If you want to make people read it slowly... you have to do it w/the actual poem. No disclaimers!
Or maybe there could be. Wouldn't that be great. A disclaimer before poems...
"please read slowly"
I actually really like that idea!
Well anyways this is a beautiful sentiment and a wonderful theme. It is though very personal, between two people.
Hm did she have some sort of brain surgery?
Go further man!
also... the "but i try" I get really hung up on the word "but." The rest of the poem is extremely hopeful... and adding "but" in there makes it seem like the speaker is working against the odds.
Even if her recovery just "takes time" the trying, i'm sure, helps it... if the speaker wasn't trying at all then would it ever happen?
It is clear that the Familiar Stranger is actually the speaker, and he is a 'stranger' to the recovering woman.
Nice title, I'm going to stop rambling now.
Good job, I'm glad to read some poetry by you!
Have a good one. |
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It grew on me and I'm moved. Perfect poem.
"Once I was your ‘everything’,
you, to me still are."
This is the most beautiful portion.Thanks for the read. |
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| This is deep. You have talent. |
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