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Belle Astell
Belle Astell
United States

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I Give the Word

I GIVE THE WORD


I give the word and nothing happens;
I give the word and nothing appears.

I say come here and no one comes;
I say go there and no one goes.

I say this is that and no one listens;
I say that is this and no one hears.

I say the kingdom is nigh and no one gathers;
I say eternity awaits and no one shows.

Yet I’ll forgive you all if you’ll only ask;
Glory is Mine so you can drop your mask.

I will be here ‘til the end of time;
Guiding and leading those who’ll be mine.

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Vision79 Comment by: Vision79 - 2008-06-07 06:49
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I think is good. Try it without the first three phrases and use singular
phrases. I think it will be stronger.
Keep up the good work.
Deepbluejc Comment by: Deepbluejc - 2008-04-27 10:15
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Wow this is really deep, good job, I love reading your stuff.
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