can you get laid up in heaven?
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can you get laid up in heaven?
they say if you look in the bible
the word it'll come unto you
just ask and your questions are answered
in phrases so perfect and true
i went to the preacher one Sunday
a question was troubling me
but when he heard what i wanted to know
he got up and walked out on me
can you get laid up in heaven?
it's something i just got to know
can you get laid up in heaven, my friend
if you can't , then i don't want to go
now it may be an asinine question
it may be it's not very nice
but when there's something you just got to know
you look for the best advice
i went to the salvation army
their kindly assistance is free
there was no screaming, or leaving the room
they simply declared war on me
can you get laid up in heaven?
it's something i just got to know
can you get laid up in heaven, my friend
if you can't , then i don't want to go
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I used to have the most terrifying thoughts as a child. I imagined that Heaven just mean't kneeling and praising God for eternity. I wanted to go to heaven, but the thought of repetition of kneeling and singing for eternity terrified me.
My mother, a conservative christian laughed and said, "maybe heaven will be a place where you can work your ass off like you always do. Maybe heaven is where you can skateboard endless streets on pavement that doesn't burn when you fall."
Maybe you do get laid in heaven. Maybe it's even better there. God knows, he made us to have sex. Maybe He's got something really earth shattering in store for us haha.
The song rhymes. I love rhyme. It flows well, and its controversial. Well done. |
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| Definitely think you need to turn this into a song! I can hear it on the radio in my head. |
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thanks for your honest feed back
cheersDaphnejean |
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Comment by: - 2006-02-27 08:39
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| Amusing poem, I'm sure it would shock any religous or conservative peron freightened of sex. For a somewhat frivolous poem it is very well written. The flow works very well and the rhyme is unforced. |
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Comment by: Lander Online- 2006-02-27 07:29
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| Its great that this piece was written by a woman. I'm sure any religious man is thinking just this. But, not being so myself, I guess we must just get as much in before the lid gets nailed. |
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