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Pantheress
Daphnejean Pantheress
Australia, q.l.d, nth rockhampton

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Cum for me.

Close your eyes, just for a moment and picture me standing behind you as you work, I'm right there behind your chair, standing close to your body. You feel my hands come to rest on your shoulders and you sigh as I squeeze them gently, leaning back against me, no words are spoken, none are needed, it's a moment of comfortable silence.
Slowly I let my fingers follow the route of your collarbone, trailing down over your chest, enjoying your warmth through your shirt. I lean harder against you, conscious of your head pressed against my breasts, aware that my breathing has already changed in manner, your closeness arousing some deep animal pleasure within me.
I slip the fingers of one hand inside your shirt, touching, exploring your skin, I can feel your heart beating steadily. Leaning down I kiss and nuzzle the back of your neck, just above your collar, just below your ear, you murmur words I can't quite hear. I let my fingers trail lower still, you can feel my hot breath against your neck, can feel my hair brushing over you and smell my perfume. Running my fingernails teasingly over your stomach you tense up and I nip gently at your neck making you jump slightly. My hand comes to rest on the waistband of your trousers. Time grinds to a halt, do I continue or do I walk away?
I stand and move away from your chair and you swing round, questions etched over your face. I move forward, between your legs and lean down, my hands on the arm rests as I look deep into your eyes before kissing your lips gently, running the tip of my tongue between them seeking entry.
You reach up, brushing the hair from my face, holding me gently as we kiss, a sweet tender moment, masking perfectly the desires bubbling below. One hand drops and teasingly skips over my breast, coming to lie upon my own. You move my hand to the bulge so prominent between your legs and I grasp tightly at you, you groan deep in the back of your throat. Our tongues dance together, touching, exploring, deeper and deeper as passion builds, i'm coming from your kisses, rolling.
We are alone, for once no one to disturb us, yet this moment could be lost in an instant, our hearts pound with excitement and desire.
My fingers quickly unzip you from your confines, I break from kissing you to gaze down as my fingers wrap around your hot flesh, my thumb sweeping up and over the hot sticky head of your ****, you sigh and lean your head back exposing your neck to me. I lean forward and nip you again, harder this time expressing my need.
Dropping to my knees between your legs I take you deep into my mouth sucking you urgently, you cry out, momentarily shocked at my sudden action, hands grabbing at my head, fingers through my hair thrusting your hips up hard and fast, ****ing my mouth. I encourage you onwards, pulling your hips close, wanting you, needing you.
Your eyes are closed tightly, neck muscles taut, breath ragged, nostrils flared as you thrust harder and harder in my mouth. I need you, I want you, I want to feel you lose control, to give yourself to me, i want to have controll. I want to feel you explode with pleasure, to fill my mouth with your seed, to feel your **** jerking and bucking uncontrollably against my tongue to have your taste sting my throat as I swallow. Picture me babe, close your eyes and feel me there with you now, my mouth encasing you, your **** slipping in and out of my wet lips, my tongue caressing you, sucking you deep into my mouth, harder and harder you thrust, faster and faster as you feel that deep nagging sensation in your balls, your need for release the only thought in your mind. I want you, to feel you, taste you, drink you

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Pantheress Comment by: Pantheress - 2006-02-27 20:46
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Thanks for your honest feed back,
take care, Daphnejean
ChrisHately Comment by: ChrisHately - 2006-02-27 14:27
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I thought this was an okay piece of writing, but I felt it was too up front. That is entirely my own opinion, but personally I prefer to not have to so up close and personal.

However, it is pretty well written, as Alien said, and sounds like it's spoken from experience (though I don't know your gender or sexuality so I can't really comment lol). However, it does give a good look into the mind of the woman while she's doing this.


Cheers,
Chris.

P.S: I agree with Alien on the ****ing asterisks lol
Comment by: - 2006-02-27 13:55
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As an exersize? it is thoroughly discriptive of a common activity- neither elevating it to anything beyond journalistic reporting, nor defiling the parties. Sort of a National Geographic well-known picture of the foreplay amongst a pair of ____________insert species.
The poem was more entertaining but it sounded familiar.
alien Comment by: alien - 2006-02-27 07:03
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I actually think this is pretty well written, apart from a few minor spelling and punctuation mistakes.
It's nothing new, but it's not the kind of thing I usually read because I usually find this kind of thing meaningless. I don't suppose this was any different, but I read it anyway. :)

But why did you **** out all the imost important words of the piece? That cheapened it for me, actually. I don't think that this site is censored. If it is, then obviously that is why you used the asterisks. But I would have preferred to see the whole thing as it's meant to be.

I also did not like the title at all. Not at all. The English language is so diverse and descriptive, I am certain that you could have done better on the part of the title. It doesn't do the piece much justice at all.

On the whole, a good read. It didn't make me sweat or writhe in my seat, which I'm sure it should have done. It made me keep my distance, actually, but it was pretty well written, as I said before :)
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