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FantasticFantasy
Raven Likes Ramen Noodles :D
United States, Wishin' I was in, Japan

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Someone like you.

Never again will your smiles haunt me,
and never again will you eyes taunt me.
Never again will you voice give me chills,
and never again will you make me take those pills.

I won't love you,
I won't know you,
I can't even remember you.
I won't lend you things,
in hopes that they'll make you
love me.
I won't look at the back of your head in
Algebra class,
hoping you'll catch me.

I won't ever love someone
like you
ever again.

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jcp200817 Comment by: jcp200817 - 2008-04-28 15:15
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I like this one, especially the second stanza, I would change can't to won't in the third line in the second stanza. That way it sounds like your just going to forget she even existed, but thats just me. anyways nice write
mikepyro Comment by: mikepyro Online- 2008-04-26 13:58
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not bad. the style of rhyme works well in the beginning. doesn't exactly break away from the pack of never again.broken love works but is a solid, emotional, and well written piece. good job!
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