A tale of two cities (in otherwords nameless)
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A tale of two cities (in otherwords nameless)
You are more real to me
More three dimensional
You have seen the good
And the bad
Of me
And yet I love you
You who has never seen rain
With me
You hold only good memories
For me
Yet who is more beautiful
You with your empty tower blocks
And dreich grey claustrophobic pressing streets
I have laughed on your streets
Danced on your streets
Wept on your streets
I can imagine life in your streets
Or are you more beautiful
Mighty sandy sunny one
With gaping alleys for the sun to caress
Only happiness happens here
Yet you are not real
Who can live here
But those who have no claim
To your soil
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| mmmm i'm undecided, it seems like only rich people can afford to live there....and not many of them tend to be scottish :) |
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| aha! I almost half right then. TY for info on dreich. Edinburgh sounds rather pleasant from what Ive heard, though never been. I take it you consider the outside intrusion unwelcome? |
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| :) It never occurred to me that there would be any doubt over the cities, i actually wrote it as a sort of response to your comment on my other poem about Glasgow. The first city is Glasgow, the second Edinburgh. The final line is a reference to the amount of English people who live in Edinburgh! dreich is pronounced dree-k (well ch at the end if you can manage it- it perfectly describes scottish weather- wet!) |
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| Í'm totally intrigued as always by your writing. I'm guessing that this isnt about Milton Keynes and Basingstoke? i thought for a moment it might include Edinburgh, but Im going with the Paris/ London of Dickens? I guess the latter is about Paris city of exiles etc? 'dreich' is a new word for me, pls advise on correct pronunciation 'drek-ch'? its very colouful, I shall use it all the time now. I know youve said its (they) are nameless but Im such a geek, pls put me out of my misery and inform, if required by email so as not to spoil it for others. |
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| Interesting. Poems without punctuation should be without punctuation is my only criticism. You have a few in there. If you use it, use it all the way through and be consistent. This is a nice piece. Thanks for sharing. Janet |
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