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Trucco
Boris Trucco
United States, GA, Atlanta

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Marcello's take on women in flip-flops: an email exchange

From: Boris

Sent: Monday, April 28, 2008 9:15 AM

To: Marcello [RubiniM@gmail.com]

Subject: How did it go?

You sounded quite excited about meeting with Crystal this Saturday at the bistro. How did it go? Did you close the deal?



From: Marcello

Sent: Monday, April 28, 2008 1:15 PM

To: Boris [boris_trucco@hotmail.com]

Subject: How did it go?

I had to let her go.

Sent from my BlackBerry



From: Boris

Sent: Monday, April 28, 2008 1:27 PM

To: Marcello [RubiniM@gmail.com]

Subject: How did it go?

Why? I introduced her to you assuming that she'd be within your target range. Crystal strikes me as the kind of wild blonde. She's single, an accomplished graphic designer. Eager for fun. Did the date go wrong?



From: Marcello

Sent: Monday, April 28, 2008 2:13 PM

To: Boris [boris_trucco@hotmail.com]

Subject: How did it go?

It wasn't that Crystal's ambitions were out of sight. I can understand that. After all, she's in her late 20s.

It wasn't that Crystal's vocabulary was still on the make, somehow stuck at pre-college levels.

It wasn't that, in verbalizing her reaction to what's going on in the world, her choice of words overflows with "awesome," "remarkable" and "I'm like--"

It is that Crystal showed up at the bistro on a Saturday evening wearing flip flops.

Sent from my BlackBerry



From: Boris

Sent: Monday, April 28, 2008 2:15 PM

To: Marcello [RubiniM@gmail.com]

Subject: How did it go?

I don't know what to say, man.



From: Marcello

Sent: Monday, April 28, 2008 2:33 PM

To: Boris [boris_trucco@hotmail.com]

Subject: How did it go?

I just don't get it. Women have the privilege of getting to choose from the most beautiful shoes available to them. Yet the best young women today can come up with are flip flops? For a date at a fancy bistro? WTF.

Sent from my BlackBerry

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Sam S Sterling Comment by: Sam S Sterling - 2008-04-28 13:57
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MMM absolutely loved the format, one I shall have to try for myself. Not so sure about the dialogue. Theyre not deep down durty as in did she give you one, nor that sophisticated either. Maybe that was your intention, as in I spent more time trying to picture her than the two guys in the email exchange?
YolandaRenee Comment by: YolandaRenee - 2008-04-28 10:07
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I liked the story, but am so disappointed cause I love flip-flops - spend lots of dollars on them in all colors! Still, it was well written, and if he has a foot fetish, flip flops wouldn't have turned him away!
brokenwing Comment by: brokenwing - 2008-04-28 05:32
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Brilliant idea on the email format for the flash fiction.
I like the email format and the conversational tone. The story illustrates that you never get a second chance to make a first impression.

Loved this part

her choice of words overflows with "awesome," "remarkable" and "I'm like--"

The story illustrates that the choice of inappropriate footwear demonstrates a certain lack of maturity. It also suggests that Crystal isn't taking the date with Marcello seriously and doesn't care about the impression she makes.

Calls to mind an epistolary novel such as Goethe's "The Sorrows of Young Werther"
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