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pitbull
Kim Salone
Australia, NSW, Sydney

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STRESSFULL

STRESSFULL

It has been a week now
And I cannot breathe
My health is fine, it is all in my head
The doctors say
Every minute I am trying to take a deep breath
But its lost half way through
So paranoid I become, gasping for air
My chest hurting so much from trying too hard
Yet I cannot stop
Let me breathe please
I can’t take this anymore
The harder I try the less air flows through my lungs
If there was not enough air in my lungs I would collapse
The doctors say
Its all in my head
So why can’t I breathe, why do I feel this way
I cannot sleep, I cannot eat, I cannot work, I cannot dream
Go away and let me breathe
They say it is stress of some kind
But I feel that everything’s fine
I’ve been happy and there is no reason why I’d be stressing
It is all subconscious, I don’t realise
The doctors say
Has it all caught up with me
Can’t I handle it anymore
Deep breath finally comes in
But as soon as its through
I’m gasping for air again
Just let me breathe
I’m telling this crazy head

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pitbull Comment by: pitbull - 2008-05-12 00:46
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thanx the breathing has finally gone...2 weeks nearly...turns out it was coz of a dentist...had to pull out my wizdom tooth...didnt anyway coz it would complicate
chelseyam Comment by: chelseyam - 2008-05-11 23:44
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Anxiety, I apparently have "asthma" even though the meds make me puke. My gran had cancer, but her headaches were all in her head. Doctors are useless unless its gonna benefit them. This is good because its honest and you cant beat honesty. Keep it up
metaphysicalg Comment by: metaphysicalg - 2008-05-09 01:53
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Very real and honest. Great job capturing that state of mind in words. I hope you figured it out and got out of it.
mikepyro Comment by: mikepyro - 2008-04-28 22:45
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A unique, and wonderfully dizzing piece.
the voice shines through without overflowing with flowery words. Very raw and emotional.
well done!
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