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Informal Grae
Graeme Sandford
United Kingdom, HAMPSHIRE, Totton

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A Love Poem From Telegrammatical Sam - Alien's Challenge

 

Telegram from concerned girlfriend

 

Darling Fin do not know how to begin stop

you are different now I suppose than at the start stop

when you held me close it seemed my heart would stop stop

remember that jape with the super-glued flip-flop stop

and that time upon the bus stop

now it is all you no longer us stop

my head so empty now is so full stop

I know you want to but we mustn't stop

you thought that I had but I never stop

when you start I know that I just can't stop

on your next visit I shall show you the door stop

your darling Sam stop

 

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alien Comment by: alien - 2008-05-01 01:41
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Good use of the challenge - I really like the changed meanings with this, actually showing just HOW punctuation can change meanings in a poem. In a weird kind of way.

Yes.
rockrobin Comment by: rockrobin - 2008-04-30 14:03
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This is both clever and poignant, and that makes it great poetry. Love it.
Mick Comment by: Mick - 2008-04-30 02:43
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This is great Grae stop

What your donin' with this stop

You're killing me stop.

Lovin' it. ;)
Jorbian Comment by: Jorbian - 2008-04-29 18:19
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I like how you did this. The telegram, an archane tool, as so many archane tools have was screaming to be made into an artisic and poetic form. You did it masterfully. I must say that.
ParchmentPoetry Comment by: ParchmentPoetry - 2008-04-29 17:49
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AS mentioned, it's amazing how the STOP fits in so many lines and changes the meaning if read as though they are a part of the message and not the telegram. Nicely done. If I had received that, I'd have to think twice if it was a hidden message not to STOP. LOL Clever guy you are. Janet
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