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brad19
Bradley J. Brett
Australia, NSW, Penrith, Sydney

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The Great Mr. Confession Man

The Great Mr Confession Man: What is your confession?

Lily: I did something terrible today. I stole from my father, and I lied to his face. Then I saw something. I watched two people. I know I shouldn’t have. But I couldn’t help but watch. It was amazing; and shocking.

The Great Mr Confession Man: Why did you do this?

Lily: Because I wanted to know. I want to be popular. I want to be in the in-crowd.

# # #

The Great Mr Confession Man: What is your confession?

Mark: I saved someone today. My friends wouldn’t approve, but I had to do it. I did. I just keep getting these feelings that I shouldn’t be. I’m confused about everything. About life. I’m questioning things I shouldn’t. Can you forgive me?

The Great Mr Confession man: Why do you feel this way?

Mark: Because I don’t know what I want anymore.

# # #

The Great Mr Confession Man: What is your confession?

Tad: I’ve had indecent thoughts. I’m becoming more violent. I think its because of everything. My father. My friends. Or at least the friends I always wanted to have. Can you forgive me?

The Great Mr Confession Man: What do you want to achieve?

Tad: I want them all to pay.

# # #

The Great Mr Confession Man: What is your confession?

Scott: I’ve not been a great guy. I’ve been doin tha wrong things. My life is shit. My best mate left me and I feel lost. I neva told this to anyone before, but I think it was true. I’m on tha drugs, I dunno what I want anymore. Can you forgive me?

The Great Mr Confession Man: Why do you think you feel this way?

Scott: Cos I loved him. I loved him like a brother man, and it hurts to think I’ll neva see him again.

# # #

The Great Mr Confession Man: What is your confession?

Peta: My boyfriend died not too long ago. At first I was lost without him, but then I began to feel happy. It was too soon, and now I’m finding myself having feelings for my brother’s best friend, and I’m scared that it is too soon after Stephen. I don’t really know what I’m doing anymore, or what I want. Can you forgive me?

The Great Mr Confession Man: Why are you feeling these feelings?

Peta: I don’t know. Maybe because I think Mark is the one. The one to keep me safe. The one that will always be there for me. No matter what happens.

# # #

The Great Mr Confession Man: You are forgiven. As always. You are forgiven, though you need to change the things which fault you. You must all resolve your issues. You must change your life.

Before its too late.

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brad19 Comment by: brad19 - 2008-05-01 23:17
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Thanks for your comment. As you can probably tell, its linked with "Dead", as the character of Peta appears in both. The grammar for some of the characters is mispelt and jumbled because its pronounced as they would say it. In the story that it originally comes from, it shows the POV's of the different characters in first person, and as so, how they speak.
qpeedore Comment by: qpeedore - 2008-05-01 20:51
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Hmm...

The Great Mr. Confession Man (GMCM) is always asking why. And they all respond to him. So that they all know why they do what they do, and why they come to him.

They come to him but they are the ones helping themselves.

At least that's what I got from it. In this one I didn't really look at spelling or grammar. To me what was being said stood out more than how it was being said.
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