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Randy Chavarria
Randy Chavarria
United States, Minnesota, South Saint Paul

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Old Love

Old Love

It’s hard to write about you,
You’re a childhood room,
Full of messes in all corners,
And it’s hard to choose
What to say about you.
I pick up this teddy-bear
And it’s stained in blood,
Then I pick up this brush
And a bloody wig dangles from it.
Oh, love, what have you become?
Where are you now?
This just isn’t you anymore.
I look straight into your eyes
Hoping to see a little further,
But you hold up that blanket
And shutter in distrust.
When did the night take over?
Was I asleep when change
Decided to rule your atmosphere?
Oh, love, I can’t pick the words
To describe you anymore.
I’ve lost you within you,
And I don’t plan on delving.
No, I’ve lost enough in you,
And don’t want to lose myself.

-Randy Chavarria

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Randy Chavarria Comment by: Randy Chavarria - 2008-05-01 01:32
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Thanks mikepyro, for your analysis and critique.
mikepyro Comment by: mikepyro - 2008-04-30 22:02
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a simple, emotional, and powerful little work.
doesn't get drug down by the other mediocre "i miss you" pieces so many writers seem content to focus on. instead it's fresh and deep.
well done.
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