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CrookedPlacebo
Bayard Bertrand
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"A Spectral Monarchy" (Revision)

Fragment April 14|April 18|May 4, 2008
(in the Works)

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Alas all the crocus pipe a murderous trespass crowning across the twilight,
To posit gold by-where leading phantasmagoria turns, of those gold’s‘, Sanctified in despot lading across sanded glades, that vapor of perfect motion!

To stone, follow in to question a seed sown in brazing seas, eggs that birth dusts; Great sepulcher sounds wedge in motionless ascent; Ash flowed Cinders dance beyond flowered brazing seas of concaves, Maelstroms of deadly time! where a throne is wedged half in motion, in the waging upon an ocean of dusts.

Fluxed away in his observance, a king murmurs on old crashed orison:


'Who levies my spirit from serfdom?
In this shadow of ruse,
In the sacerdotal hone?'

'Intuit, stemming in this brood;
When bred upon a still throne-
An altar of current vernal,'
'I there froze when the creatures taught,
What marked me here in the eternal!'

I heard there in a distant chant of some growing sky:

your too Nestled in the Alarum
that founded in these widdershins,
by syndicate fails sent to dispossess
within these spurn trines of sin.

There in-Between those trines of sin,
weighing upon one replicating rent,
you've harbored shadowy usurper surfs
that deform our skies to dullards dim.

No appeals are placed with such kings, whom raise in too tooled wrought, to strut upon their dead limbs!
Those same monarchs dissipate upon one another, by their old myriads seen as pilots of excommunicated whims!

(c) May 4, 2008
-M.R. Doyle

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CrookedPlacebo Comment by: CrookedPlacebo - 2008-05-02 11:43
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-Trine- is an Astrological term that would apply to an natal chart, with a type of position between planets. The illusion is to identify with a stream of order, and a solid expression of damnation. An a ascent into unknowing -Widdershins-(being: the opposite of light), Thus identifying with the blindness of faith, or the seeing of that which is simply unknowable. -I wanted it's deeper meaning to apply in a Christian sense, with the three god, or with orthodoxy of the eastern cross, and that idea tallies itself away from a labor of absolution, or the veil that is created from the so-called real world, when one transcends into that which is lit by a blackened sight.

For your comment on the usage of the -Phantasmagoria-, I think I agree with you on that. Which is bad because it sends me to a place where I have to reconsider the entire structure of the implications used by its abridgment. Oh well, no pain, no game.

Many Thanx. Your comment is most appreciated.
Johndeprey Comment by: Johndeprey - 2008-05-01 19:56
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It's a verbal Salvador Dali. It reminds me of computer generated sentenses of the 1960s. Lots of words included that I don't know the meaning of (When I bother to look up a word in my dictionary and find it's not there, like "trines", I don't feel inclined to look up another. "trines" could be Cockney for trains...), and others that I just don't like - I think "phantasmagoria" would ruin any poem. However when you read it you do get bright flashes of Dali-esk images, like "crowning across the twilight" and "flowered brazing seas". But by "Cinders" do you really mean Cinderella? Is "Tittle" a sexual inuendo (witty if it is!)?
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