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Apollo
Vincent Slade
United States, Virginia, Richmond

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The Last Diner in Purgatory

Wooden, wilting fan blades
Draped over the sky like dead fingers.

A monotonous, monosyllabic waitress…
Peeling pastel, plastic seats
Bathed in fluorescent light.

This is the last diner in purgatory.

Warm, flat, non-alcoholic beers;
Cigarette burns and greasy hairnets…

Cheesy post cards bleeding aged yellow.
This cheese cake has been here,
Rotating in it’s glass case for years.

This is the only diner in purgatory.

Reading last year’s newspaper, again…
Get someone else’s under-cooked order.

Only sporks, stale air, and a flickering exit sign…
I shake the dust off my sleeve, sigh,
And ask the mannequin sitting next to me for the salt.

This is the last diner in purgatory.

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easywriter58 Comment by: easywriter58 - 2008-05-02 14:44
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What a brilliant usage of metaphores!

The repetition of "This is the........" makes me feel like you intended this to be song lyrics. Did you?

I would think this would make a great song.

"Peeling pastel, plastic seats" The alliteration is great here but I would replace "peeling" with something else-Is she peeling plastic off of what? The metal or the stuffing? Just an opinion-

"Rotating in it’s glass case for years." (I would trade in "years" for "centuries"
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