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thembraincells
Katie js
United States, Wisconsin, Brookfield

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Time

What time is it?
Time is a noun,
But not a person,
Or place.

What's the time?
Look at the arrows,
Up and down,
Left and right,
Spinning all around.

I've got enough time,
But I can't hold it,
Feel it,
Or use it for anything,
I just waste it.

You've got to much time,
On your hands,
And you do weird things,
I do too,
But I never have enough.

I'll give you some time,
But I need the report by monday,
But you can't hand it over,
You can't control when time is up,
You can't play father time,
You can barely fix a clock.

You can't take too much time,
It just doesn't work,
No one's got it in the first place,
So you can't take it,
If it's not even there.

And time is our imagination,
A pattern in the day,
The revolution of the earth,
The space we have to play.

Time is an invention,
A spinning shadow,
And we use it to judge,
When we get chances,
Then the second,
And when we've had enough,
The clock
Strikes
"Give up".

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mikepyro Comment by: mikepyro - 2008-05-08 20:41
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But not a person,
Or place.
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does not need but since you're telling them what time is ( a noun )

a stark style and very well written.
unique visuals and word choice. good job.
johnnycoolhand Comment by: johnnycoolhand - 2008-05-06 21:03
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more conceptual then emotional.
itsalrightma Comment by: itsalrightma - 2008-05-05 23:34
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I liked how it slowly built up to the end. "Give up" i really enjoyed this you have your own style and i really like it...like i said keep it up lol
MitchellNoel Comment by: MitchellNoel - 2008-05-05 21:14
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Solid start and finish...lost me a little bit in the middle.

Spelling: You've got to (too) much time

But I need the report by monday, (Monday-there might be a reason you chose lower case, but I'm not sure?)

Particularly like the first stanza and:

You can't play father time, (maybe Father Time need upper case too?)
You can barely fix a clock.

Good work :)
Wildefriend Comment by: Wildefriend - 2008-05-02 17:44
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Time is such an interesting concept. Does it exist? I don't know. There's an unusual musical piece called "Time Piece" by Paul Patterson, where he alleges that the discovery of time is what messed up The Garden of Eden. It's a weird but somehow logical idea.
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