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MY FATHER IS NOT A HERO
MY FATHER IS NOT A HERO
“A father is much more than just another human being to his children” – (Thomas.W.Simpson).
-Dad, will you watch telly with me tomorrow? –Ted implored.
-Tomorrow? You mean the football match, don’t you...Oh, yes! That’s great! – His father replied enthusiastically.
-YEAH!!!!!........- the young boy yelled out.
It would be a good day for them but sometimes people couldn’t control everything in life. Poor Ted! He didn’t know that something really bad would happen to his father.
…He was lying on a bed and looked like he was sleeping. It was 2 days and everyone prayed that he could wake up or at least he could get better although doctors said it seemed impossible…too late. His 4-year-old son, Ted, thought that his father had to fight against a dark genie but no matter what happened his father was always a brave man. All of them expected a miracle but opposite what they wanted, they couldn’t do anything to keep him staying with them. He passed away. The miracle didn’t come.
The story had to become a tragedy if Ted didn’t get over and keep moving on, but here he did it. If he had told us he wasn’t sad, it would have been a lie. After his father’s death, it was really a hard time for Ted and his family. Sometimes his mother caught Ted sitting alone at a front door. She worried a lot because she was afraid he could be shock…His father-his hero- left him unexpectedly. When Ted saw his dad in hospital, he couldn’t believe that his dad sometimes was so weak; different to usual. He was this man with weaknesses. In addition, Ted cried, he wished life could bring his dad back so that they could live together and go wherever they liked.To a young boy like Ted, the father was a giant from whose shoulder he could see forever. His father was not perfect, of course, he made mistake but even if worse comes to worse, he never lied to Ted, never…That’s why Ted loves his dad as the whole being, not as a statue. Ted respects every moment with his father but now he realizes: Heroes are just human beings and they cannot live forever. Yet he doesn’t love him because he’s a hero, just because he’s Ted’s father.
The story here is also my story and Ted is my younger brother. My father is not a hero but the way he lived and brought us up has proved that he’s our hero.
“Hero” means someone who is Honest – Energetic – Realistic & Optimistic. That’s a real hero.
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what struck me most of this story, was the creative sense of style: the opening quote, then dialogue, then paragraph on the death, the paragraph on afterwards, and "The story here is also my story and Ted is my younger brother. My father is not a hero but the way he lived and brought us up has proved that he’s our hero.", and the closing thought. A very creative way to tell the story and make the point.
A detail I felt was missing, altought perhaps this was intentional: is the opening dialogue taking place w/ ill father in a hospital bed, or a healthy father who suddenly falls into a coma. I'm thinking the latter. you could add just a few words to the "...he was lying" paragraph to explain what happened (stroke?)..
anyway, a very powerful story and I loved the creative style you used to tell it. |
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Four years old is way too young for a child to learn that their parents are mere mortals. That life realization shouldn't come to one until he or she is old enough to be on their own.
I love how you wrote this through Ted and not yourself. It shows a sense of selflessness! |
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oh wow! This is really amazing... it caught me on another level... It's so... heartfelt...
I loved the innocence of where Ted felt his father had to fight a dark genie... creative...
and the fact that he loved his dad as a person not as a statue or a hero...
ummm for some reason I suspect this was written on editred and not in Word b/c there are some instances where the grammar is a bit off...
"The story had to become a tragedy if Ted didn’t get over and kept moving on..."
"She worried a lot because she was afraid he could be shock..."
"His father was not perfect, of course, he made mistake but..."
minor details... other than that... I loved this story... thnx for sharing a piece of yourself... p.s. the title is perfect... |
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