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Paradise Lost (abridged)
Hey! Have you seen Earth recently?
It's covered in this green slime
with things crawling about in it.
Send Michael down with a spray
or something. What? It was just
a doodle? You know I never
approved of your Big Bang
anyway. All that matter, and
now this! Let's see one of
those things, that green thing.
So the brown thing eats the
green things. The spotted thing
eats the brown thing, then
they die and get eaten by the
white things, and the green things
eat the white things, and...
what's this? Now that's really
dis-gus-ting! It eats everything.
It.... I do believe it knows
it exists. It thinks! It knows
what it does. Look, this all has
a certain elegance, but Satan love,
I do wish you’d grow up. Please
get rid of it, and go and help your mother!
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Haha, put a big grin on my face. Very funny. Directed at God? I know he would approve such wonderful nonsense. I don’t know if Milton would enjoy it however, I do believe his Paradise Lost was a bit more fire and brimstone. Although you got Satan right.
Have you ever read Milton's Samson Agonistes? For some reason this reminded me of that work's treatment of “righteous” murderings. Samson is like a pre-jesus killing philistines with donkey jaw-bones and burning foxes tied together with their tails. Kind of like "the brown thing eats the green thing."
Thanks for the laugh! |
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| I wrote it just having finished AN Wilson's biography of John Milton. Also, I was thinking of Carl Jung's speculation that Christianity shouldn't have a Trinity because four is a more auspicious number. He suggested Father/Son/Holy Ghost/Mary, or Father/Son/Holy Ghost/Satan. I think Milton and Jung are gloriously cuckoo! |
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| Interesting, weird, gripping - all at the same time. Well done. |
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Loved the title, and then the tone of the poem. Excellent, and thoroughly enjoyed.
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Comment by: Jorbian - 2008-05-04 20:36
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| An interesting understanding of things, I must say. |
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