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ThePenguin
Peter Budvietas
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New Zealand, Auckland

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Liquid

A tiny drop. Not even a drop,a droplet. Colourless, odourless, tasteless.

It hovers, as if looking for a signpost. Should it go down? That’s the natural direction, the way instinct tells it to go. Should it go up? There’s an urge to soar, to look for something different. Or left? Or right? Forwards? Backwards?

New urges, new pulls to somewhere else, away from this point in time and space. Perhaps it should break up, go in all the directions at once. But then it would not be whole, but a plethora of wholes.

The world shakes, and it reaches for the final destination, its true direction.

A tiny drop. Not even a drop, a droplet. Colourless, odourless, tasteless…

And deadly in that glass of wine

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rupertdepaula Comment by: rupertdepaula - 2008-05-07 04:01
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wonderfully written piece...just not so sure about that last line.

after the metaphysical master class the poison aspect seemed ether a little forced, or just not quite ringing true.

absolutely excellent descriptions, though...a real mindbender
ParchmentPoetry Comment by: ParchmentPoetry - 2008-05-06 11:24
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I never knew poison was so ambiguous. Cleverly written. Thanks for sharing. Janet
alcarty Comment by: alcarty Online- 2008-05-06 08:07
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'And deadly in that glass of wine.' I'm afraid my piece took liquid along the poisonous path as well. Yours took a more circuitous route and gathered wonder along the way. Mine was predictable. Good read, Penguin.
Arley Comment by: Arley - 2008-05-05 05:49
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Whoa, we must not be talking a particle of water vapor as I thought at first but some sort of bacterium or virus. Nice and mysterious, Down Under!
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