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staceychil
stacey chillemi
United States, NJ, manalapan

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The Words of an Angel

As I sit in a world of darkness



I look around to see no one



The cold wind has filled my soul



The rivers have poured inside my body



And the weight of the waters holds me back from seeing the light of day



What should I do?



I feel helpless,



Paralyzed in my own fears



And lost with no directions or roads to take



Suddenly, a felt a laser of energy bolt though my body



I yelled, “I’m so tired of feeling this way, I need help”



Suddenly, gold light appeared



And a man stood before me



You foolish man,



You choose this path the moment you chose to give up and wallow in your sorrows



I can not help you



You need to help yourself.



There are no rivers in your soul holding you back from light of the world



The strength lies within you



Look in my eyes and tell me what you see



The lost man looked into the angels eyes and said, I see a man who gets his strength from helping others



He does not waste time focusing on useless matters



If you dig deep enough my child



You will find precious gift inside yourself



Gifts you never knew you had



Learn from others



Then help yourself



Once you helped yourself



Go out and help the world around you



Because many people feel as you do



The angel suddenly disappeared



The lost man was no longer lost



He was determined to waste no time



And he was going to use his time to help others



Just as the angel helped him



The man got up



He realized the only thing holding him down was himself



The room was no longer dark



The light of life had entered



Dig deep in yourself and lift yourself



The answer to your problems lies within



Use your gifts



For the greatest gift is the gift of giving.

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Wildefriend Comment by: Wildefriend - 2008-05-05 17:56
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It's good but maybe a few lines have to be adjusted...

The rivers have flooded my body (your line needs to have a bite more violence)

Since you have talked about water in this way, perhaps when referring to the man

"There are no dams in your soul holding you back..."


Dig deep in yourself

Lift yourself

If you just get rid of the words that impede the flow, things work out much better.

Best,
FC
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