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The Words of an Angel
As I sit in a world of darkness
I look around to see no one
The cold wind has filled my soul
The rivers have poured inside my body
And the weight of the waters holds me back from seeing the light of day
What should I do?
I feel helpless,
Paralyzed in my own fears
And lost with no directions or roads to take
Suddenly, a felt a laser of energy bolt though my body
I yelled, “I’m so tired of feeling this way, I need help”
Suddenly, gold light appeared
And a man stood before me
You foolish man,
You choose this path the moment you chose to give up and wallow in your sorrows
I can not help you
You need to help yourself.
There are no rivers in your soul holding you back from light of the world
The strength lies within you
Look in my eyes and tell me what you see
The lost man looked into the angels eyes and said, I see a man who gets his strength from helping others
He does not waste time focusing on useless matters
If you dig deep enough my child
You will find precious gift inside yourself
Gifts you never knew you had
Learn from others
Then help yourself
Once you helped yourself
Go out and help the world around you
Because many people feel as you do
The angel suddenly disappeared
The lost man was no longer lost
He was determined to waste no time
And he was going to use his time to help others
Just as the angel helped him
The man got up
He realized the only thing holding him down was himself
The room was no longer dark
The light of life had entered
Dig deep in yourself and lift yourself
The answer to your problems lies within
Use your gifts
For the greatest gift is the gift of giving.
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It's good but maybe a few lines have to be adjusted...
The rivers have flooded my body (your line needs to have a bite more violence)
Since you have talked about water in this way, perhaps when referring to the man
"There are no dams in your soul holding you back..."
Dig deep in yourself
Lift yourself
If you just get rid of the words that impede the flow, things work out much better.
Best,
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