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lancslass
Anna Barton
United States, Colorado, Denver

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Liquid Running,Wee Challenge 34

Emma pulls up on the reins. Liquid Running slows, turns and trots back along the track. Brian Daley stares at his stop watch. “She loves to run, Dad,” Emma calls, “she’s a winner, isn’t she?”

“She'll be the pride of Ireland. The fastest horse I ever bred. Runs like rain down the Mountains of Mourne. Next year, she’ll race.”

“Not until she’s four, Dad, no country allows it.” Emma laughs. “Not even for you.”

“America does.”

“It does? No, Dad. Three is too young. You know bones are not mature, ankles still need toughening.”

“Now, don’t fret yourself, three-year-olds race in America all the time, and if they’re sprained they run them on painkillers. Tis perfectly legal.”

“Legal? Animal cruelty, more like.”

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Leigh Comment by: Leigh - 2008-06-02 05:23
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Nice story Anna. Good punchy dialogue between Emma and her dad. I never cease to admire writers who can tell a good story in a few words. Emma sounds a very astute young girl.
lancslass Comment by: lancslass - 2008-05-22 14:13
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Thank you all. You see, Karen, this is exactly the sort of grammar correction that we don't get when you don't judge.
karjon Comment by: karjon - 2008-05-22 13:41
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Very good, Anna. I hate horse racing - don't care what age the horse is - especially things like the Grand National.

Minor picky thing - I think 'Dad' should be capitalised when it's used as a term of address, but I could be wrong.

Thanks for the read.

Cheers

Karen
kentuckymike Comment by: kentuckymike - 2008-05-12 07:17
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Being that my aunt and uncle breed race horses back in Kentucky, I can relate to this story. I think all horse racing is cruel and inhumane. Nice story.
vanessaniki Comment by: vanessaniki - 2008-05-11 20:11
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Sadly, that's what it's like here as well as other places in the world. You can get whatever you want for the right price. Morals go out of the window for some. But it's doubly sad when the afflicted one cannot speak up for their defense. Great story.
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