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NIcoleTighe
Nicole Tighe
Australia, NSW, Sydney

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Roommate

ROOMMATE: Short Film
FADE IN:
EXT. OFFICE BUILDING -- EARLY MORNING
Its quiet for an important looking building.

INT. OFFICE BUILDING - RECEPTION
A neatly dressed WOMAN enters with her bag slung over her
shoulder. She turns on the office lights and makes her way
through the maze of desks to hers.
Before she can even prepare herself for the days work her COWORKER from the desk across appears with a cup of coffee.

CO-WORKER
Hey, how did you get here so early?

The WOMAN smiles politely.

WOMAN
I got a lift in with my roommate.

The CO-WORKER doesn't seem interested as she settles into
her own desk and takes a sip of her coffee.

CO-WORKER
Lets get this day over with so we
can enjoy our long weekend.

The WOMAN smiles and prepares herself for the days work.
CUT TO:

INT. OFFICE BUILDING -- LATER
The WOMAN is busy typing away when her phone rings, casually she answers.

WOMAN
Hello..
(lovingly)
Hey... Yeah sort of, what are you up
to?... Lucky you... No its ok, I'll
take the bus... ok, bye.

She hangs up and goes back to her typing. The CO-WORKER pops her head around.

CO-WORKER
Who was that?

WOMAN
(taken-aback)
My roommate.

CO-WORKER
Oh. Hopefully it doesn't get to
busy cause I'm in relaxo mode already.

They both carry on with their work.
CUT TO:

INT. OFFICE BUILDING -- LATER
The CO-WORKER strolls up beside the WOMAN's desk reading a
take-away menu.

CO-WORKER
I'm ordering lunch from Tony's, you
want anything?

WOMAN
No thanks. My roommate made pasta
last night, I've got leftovers.

The Co-WORKER walks off to make her order.
CUT TO:

INT. OFFICE BUILDING - TOILET
The WOMAN stands at the mirror admiring and adjusting her
necklace.
The CO-WORKER burst in, stops to see what the WOMAN is doing.

CO-WORKER
Nice necklace.

Before the WOMAN can answer, the CO-WORKER is in a cubical.

WOMAN
Thanks. My Roommate bought it for me.

The CO-WORKER isn't interested, the WOMAN exits.

CO-WORKER
Oh, I think my lunch from Tony's is repeating on me.

CUT TO:

INT. OFFICE BUILDING -- AFTERNOON
The WOMAN stands waiting for the elevator.
The CO-WORKER appears alongside her.

CO-WORKER
Home time already.

WOMAN
Yep.

CO-WORKER
Got any long weekend plans?

WOMAN
Not really, you?

CO-WORKER
Nah.
(beat)
I was thinking of going to see Judith
Lucy tonight, but I've got no one to
go with.

WOMAN
She's great, you should go. My
Roommate and I saw her last weekend.

The Co-WORKER ponders over it as the elevator door opens,
they get on.
CUT TO:

INT. APARTMENT -- EVENING
The WOMAN enters the apartment, exhausted.
The apartment is simple and clean, except for the mess the
WOMAN makes dumping her bag on the lounge seat.
The WOMAN can hear faint mood music coming from the bathroom, she walks over.

INT. APARTMENT BATHROOM
The bathroom door is open, the WOMAN steps in, resting against the door frame.
Her ROOMMATE (beautiful woman with long black hair) is lying with eyes closed in the bath tub surrounded by bubbles.

WOMAN
Hello roommate.

The ROOMMATE opens her eyes, smiles.

ROOMMATE
Hello.

Long pause.

It looks as if the WOMAN is about to turn and walk off, but instead she begins to takes off her jacket while
simultaneously removing her shoes. Leaving everything where it falls.
The ROOMMATE watches the WOMAN, partially dressed step into the bathtub.
As they adjust, the ROOMMATE and WOMAN lean in to each other and kiss.
The WOMAN turns around and leans back onto the ROOMMATE, who embraces her. They kiss again.

Fade to black.

The end.

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RyanWHarris Comment by: RyanWHarris - 2008-06-26 02:35
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Recently I wrote the screenplay to my novel,The Future Of evolution, and man I know how hard it is to get it right from a film Directors prospective, This is very well done, abit obvious, maybe you should give the characters names maybe, and correct the dialogue "Oh. Hopefully it doesn't get to busy cause I'm in relaxo mode already." it would sound better like this
"Oh,(pause) it best not get too busy today, cause I'm already in relaxo mode."
other than that nice effort
Sammie B Comment by: Sammie B - 2008-05-27 06:40
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I personally know its difficult to write creatively when in screen play mode. Its like the structure of its form faults and stunts your craetive flow. I think the hidden ending surprise was a little transparent by the obvious interest the COWORKER has with the WOMAN. It screams gay. I applaude your efforts at screen play. Its very hard. A little more in the way of developing the COWORKERS previous relationship with the WOMAN, I feel, would go a long way.

But I definitely enjoyed it. =)
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