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I recall...
“I remember you driving a 2008 Mercedes-Benz.”
“Yes, I just got it yesterday.”
“Remember the colour?”
“Of course!”
“Remember the feeling of how it drove?”
“Naturally! It’s brand new!”
“Well, a plane just dropped out of the sky into the parking lot. Good job you remember something about your old car.”
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| Oh, dear! Some people just like to gloat. Surprise ending cause I thought it was going to be stolen. Where would this person be not to hear the plane drop from the sky, or should I say, land in the parking lot? Oh, don’t tell me, he’s deaf, right? Anyway, at least this story is up above fifty, just. |
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Comment by: troyarn Online- 2008-05-16 16:45
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| It just seemed odd that a plane would drop out of the sky and the owner of the car never heard it. Still, it was a suprise ending. |
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Comment by: Arley - 2008-05-14 06:30
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| I sure hope that ol' boy had insurance, heh heh. Totally fooled me with the ending, I thought it was going to have been stolen at the end or someone had stolen it from the other character and sold it to the current owner. Nice twist! |
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"Good job you remember something about your old car.” I'd rework this sentence. Maybe "Good thing" or "It's good."
Maybe, "A plane made an emergency landing into the parking lot and couldn't avoid your car. Now, it's just a memory"
Course that may be an expression you use that I am not familiar with. |
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