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Somnius
Jake Cooper
United States, Indiana, Lamar

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The Shape

Colorful Medley of browns and greens and all
That, there must be something other than
This chaotic scheme of disorderly
Nouns and verbs and tables and chairs
Screams and yells and clapping tumbles over there.

It’s a rush,
an Adrenal, overall
completely typical
systematic
rush, of all
things hypocritical
and of good will.
With water verse acid verse pop,
all that crap over and over again.
Please make it stop.

Goddamn, it’s everything,
it’s the most precious thing.
Wish I loved everything,
I’d take it with anything.

Makes the shape you called mysterious,
that shape and color filled with wonderful
tragedy and glorifies the stuff that
we call something.

I haven’t seen that shape, but
have been trying to open my eyes
to seize the moment
that there is no disguise.

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Somnius Comment by: Somnius - 2008-05-14 20:57
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The bump?
shuchikalra Comment by: shuchikalra - 2008-05-14 20:55
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this flows well except for the "bump" in the third para...it seemed a little out of place to me...but maybe it was intended so..that is something you as the poet would know best. Everything else was great!Good Going...
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