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Thunderpen
Parris ja Young
United States, Montana, Laughing Lady

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EVERY TREE A PRAYER

On the east-facing foothills every spring
apple blossoms take to wing
spinning like Quaken Aspen leaves.
Snowflake blossoms fill the sky
gather by puddles like butterflies —
make blossom snowdrifts inches deep.

We disregard saints, temples, words of gold;
what we worship is what we hold
before us: TV, table, gasoline,
power, pussy, hi-tech things. But pruning
is prayer and the tree the granting.
Tree is giving: sheltering, selfless, noble, green.

I’ll climb each tree with loppers and saw
remove deadwood, crossed wood, all
the overcrowded choking wood,
so the sun can reach down deep —
and old untended trees can breathe
and achieve another childhood.

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mitra Comment by: mitra - 2008-05-19 03:58
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Each stanza feels like a different point of view. Interesting. Love the title.
Boonrassi Comment by: Boonrassi - 2008-05-16 08:51
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its beautiful Parris..

apple blossoms (will) take wing

//might not be needed.. no biggie for sure.

We disregard saints, temples, words of gold;

//nice..

But pruning
is prayer

//yes indeed..

I’ll climb each tree with loppers and saw

//love love that..

so the sun (can) reach down deep

//not really needed.. have to change 'reach' if you chop it though.
the title is fantastic.. i keep saying it over and over.
thanks,
T
poetguyraza Comment by: poetguyraza - 2008-05-15 03:51
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That's pretty nice.. I like your style of writing.. Though your poem is very restricted through punctuation.. I suggest you let the verses go free.. That would certainly give the poem a better feel
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