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akabinny
Lindsay Leggett
Canada, Ontario, Toronto

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For the night fly Falling birds

The butterflies have died away,
We’re listening to a song sung by
A man who’s thinking ‘bout
the simple life of someone else.
We’re staring at the stars and
Wondering why their secrets are secret
And we’ve got secrets too,
But how’s it so hard to be true,
But it was so hard to be true.

I’m pacing up and down the stairs
I’m tearing out my hair, to find
Something to ease my mind
I don’t know where you are this time,
I’m staring at your empty chair
And knowing that I pushed you,
I pushed you away,
Please know I wanted you to stay.
You lift me up out of the grey,
You lift me up out of the grey.

Chorus

And I can’t envision you,
I’m blind and I’m so high…
And the clouds are forming your
Silhouette in the sky,
Don’t let me fall this time.

Don’t let me fall
The landing breaks my bones
and makes me feel so small.



So, I have no title for this at all. Any ideas?

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akabinny Comment by: akabinny - 2008-05-16 22:11
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Really love that Dan- Using it!
nad04 Comment by: nad04 - 2008-05-16 05:01
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hey..how about the "the void you left" or "omnipresent you"
Beck Comment by: Beck Online- 2008-05-15 17:42
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For The Night Fly The Falling Birds

That's what I would have called it... It reads like it's begging for someone to sing it which is obviously a great thing for a lyric to have and a surprisingly difficult thing to achieve.
Sam S Sterling Comment by: Sam S Sterling - 2008-05-15 09:54
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MMMmm been racking my brain cell here. I find it difficult to find any one title which encompasses it all or gives it a unifying theme, there again Im not much good with titles anyway. The only things that came to me were 'Grey Blues', 'Missing Inaction', 'Rainbow in Grey', 'High Low'.
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