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Comment by: MsWizard Online- 2008-05-19 21:49
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| Matt and Darkpoet...this is one of my earlier pieces.... |
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| I had a more difficult time extracting the emotion from this than your other poems. I'm a big fan of the less-is-more method you use so well. The line "and I am contented …… to see …… with my blinded sight" sure is a solid ending I must say. |
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The contrast of ideas is rather interesting in this piece. The speaker opens by addressing that she sees crystal clear, yet she paints this picture of movie reels, which gives a sense of....not actual reality. I found this beginning to be absolutely fascinating.
I agree with the other comment about color. The colors in this play an important role, and it's a good suggestion to make them stand out even more. The speaker opens by saying she sees them clearly, anyway. |
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Comment by: MsWizard Online- 2008-05-16 08:58
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| I'm actually not quite sure how to respond to you PromKing...did the American Dream ever truly exist? Or what is only...a dream...... |
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| Interesting view. I've been considering a parallel one while trying to envision what the death of the American Dream looks like. Does it collapse under titanic squalor induced by anti-philanthropist tycoons in great display or, instead go out in a whimper choked off by the road of designer intentions. Different views, different dreams I guess. |
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