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fantasy
Fairytales die a hard death
Tales of fairies,
things dreamed,
start to lose their luster
with reality.
The hope though,
that’s a hard thing to kill.
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| This piece flows rather well. |
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| I like this, but I think if you changed the last part to, " But Hope, though, is a hard thing to kill" or "The hope though, is a hard thing to kill" or some variation of the two. If you inserted, "now" before thats, then that might work too. I dont know, just trying to be helpful, I like the poem though, and thats a hard thing to kill. |
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| I don't normally do this, but I'm feeling a bit tired...so I'm going to settle with just a "good job" on this one. I like the way this poem flows. I always read poetry out loud, and this just rolls of the tongue....and I do like how this little hope comes in at the end, it gives the entire piece a bit of an uplift. |
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